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Right, exactly. by ~Synnestarr:iconSynnestarr:

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He's just as empty as a page, you know,
As far as empty pages go
And his could be the best I've ever read

He could talk about the football scores
And t.v. shows that he adores
They're the closest things to truth he's ever said

He doesn't have a bluff to call
'Cause really there's no "him" at all
He's practically among the living dead

And there he sits inside his shell
A martyr in a made up hell
A victim of the world inside his head
©2008-2009 ~Synnestarr
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~silverwingsoffire:iconsilverwingsoffire: Mar 31, 2008, 8:19:08 PM
Wow, so few words...and yet you say so much. He sounds like a zombie...but you think it's just how he is...or what he's become?

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All I need is a piece of paper
and something to write with, and then
I can turn the world upside down.
- Nietzche

Everything you can imagine is real. -Pablo Picasso
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~Synnestarr:iconSynnestarr: Apr 1, 2008, 8:25:07 AM
if i had to hazard to guess....




ah i still dont know

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scratch it too much, and it will either spread or bleed...
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~Synnestarr:iconSynnestarr: Apr 1, 2008, 8:37:31 AM
damnit, hazard A* guess.

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scratch it too much, and it will either spread or bleed...
~Necrofeelyouryack:iconNecrofeelyouryack: May 14, 2008, 7:09:40 AM
It's so frank and colloquial, but it's powerful, and the meter is perfect. I like. :)

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"If you bring forth what is within you, what you bring forth will save you. If you do not bring forth what is within you, what you do not bring forth will destroy you."
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~Synnestarr:iconSynnestarr: May 14, 2008, 7:15:11 AM
thanks, that means a lot

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scratch it too much, and it will either spread or bleed...
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~Unaccompanied-me:iconUnaccompanied-me: May 18, 2008, 9:10:30 PM
I agree with Necro, The meter is excellent. You tend to do a good job of that from what I've seen. Just out of curiosity, are you jealous of this person? It seems like you're talking to someone who thinks they see something in him that isn't there... but perhaps I'm just drawing parallels with my own life again. :D Anyway, you're doing a good job of succinctly summarizing my life right now... :o
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~Unaccompanied-me:iconUnaccompanied-me: May 18, 2008, 9:13:31 PM
I'd also like to say that I would have faved both of the ones I've commented on thus far, but if anyone from my school got curious and read my comments it could mean trouble :) Just don't ask...haha, just know that even though i haven't faved, I still like.
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~Synnestarr:iconSynnestarr: May 19, 2008, 2:00:52 AM
i never looked too far into why i wrote it out (but you could be on to something with that jealousy theory)

also, whether or not you fav, the comments still mean a lot to me, so thanks =D and im glad you enjoyed

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scratch it too much, and it will either spread or bleed...
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~Unaccompanied-me:iconUnaccompanied-me: May 19, 2008, 3:42:53 PM
I've found that jealousy is a lot of times why I write antagonistic things...

But yes, I've greatly enjoyed your poetry thus far, and I look forward to seeing more :D
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